August 27, 2008

haiku wednesday - August 27, 2008

This week's words are

Barely time to think today, let alone play along.

hot, desperate gasps
her hands traveled my body
short lapse; kiss once more

"a lapse in judgment"
desperate to regain trust
she traveled by train

cold, desperate gasps
her spirit traveled away
love's lapse made him snap


Anonymous said...

I loved the image the first one reates!

You always do so well.

Practising writing

gautami tripathy said...


TC said...

The first one definitely painted a picture! :)

Tumblewords: said...

you've hit a superb haiku stride!

paisley said...

wish i could write like that when i cant don't have time to think....

UL said...

oh my, you haiku i have to gasp for air ;)

Anonymous said...

I like the two opposite haikus (first and third poem), sort of like a person changing personality within just a few seconds

Robin S. said...

Wow. I have no favorites this week-I love them all!

Anonymous said...

I agree with Lissa...1 and 3 are yin and yang. I love how the few simple words describe huge emotions - I never could haiku and I so admire it.
Thanks for your kind words on my post--hope you'll be back.

susan said...

especially like the first one. thanks for the read.

Anonymous said...

a talent for ku... and today romance ku.... the vision of movement...

Sarah Laurenson said...

My wife forwarded these to me. Thought you'd appreciate them.

Cat Haiku

You must scratch me there!
Yes, above my tail!
Behold, elevator butt.

The rule for today
Touch my tail, I shred your hand.
New rule tomorrow.

Humans are so strange.
Mine lies still in bed, then screams
My claws are not that sharp.

Cats meow out of angst
"Thumbs! If only we had thumbs!
We could break so much!"

Chris Eldin said...

The second one is my favorite, but all are very nice!

Sam said...

Love these - bravo!
How do you choose the words?

Jade said...

one and two are my favorite,
very creative.