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This week's words are
reality
fan
mind
don't mind the steroids
Bonds fan looks the other way
reality ball
fan creative flames
fiction or reality?
it's all in the mind
July 25, 2007
haiku wednesday
don't mind the steroids
Bonds fan looks the other way
reality ball
fan creative flames
fiction or reality?
it's all in the mind
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Thanks Peter for the critique. I agree it breaks down a bit, but I seldom redo poems. This one I may.
I love your haiku, they are right on the mark. :)
Rose
xo
As rose says , you haiku are very tight and apt.
Hi,
I wrote a second version of my poem. If you have time, I would greatly appreciate your opinion.
Rose
xo
Great haiku... and three, WOW! Even a topical baseball one. So very tight with the words so connected. Well done.
I particularly enjoyed the second one. A very clever and economical use of the words. JC
i loved them,, i haven't ventured into the world of haiku's much.. you make me rethink that
Very cool haiku -- well, the second one is hot with the flames!
:)
Yes, very topical on the first. Good job, PJD.
Break the record. I'm
Sick of hearing about it
Town hall meeting? Please.
Could I be that blind?
Then I remember Pete Rose
Reality hits
don't mind the steroids
Bonds fan looks the other way
reality ball
Oh this flipping makes me ill. I wrote a post about it the other day, how I'm sooo sick of hearing about Barry Bonds and the idea that someday kids are going to look up to him and hello, Hank Aaron owes him NOTHING.
Good job. Wish I could write haiku.
I love the way haikus force you to express things in so few words. You've done this very well.
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