January 30, 2008

haiku wednesday - January 30, 2008

This week's words are
approach
bottle
smooth



smooth approach... hot score!
warm the baby bottle, dear
(should have used condoms)


please, stewardess, please
bring a bottle of smooth scotch
failed approach, frayed nerves


violent approach
jagged bottle, knife slash wild
smooth words turned ugly

22 comments:

paisley said...

ooooo progressively tougher... very nice...

watermaid said...

Very clever word play.

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Laughed at the first one. Gasped at the last.

Rose

xo

The Mama Bear said...

from one to three you cover some wide serious ground....I vote for the first, because the third worries me a bit.

Sherry said...

Each one of these is excellent -- each one deeper/different. I especially liked the 2nd one!!!

Square1 said...

I think the first one is my favorite, but I liked the second as well.

tumblewords said...

great selection - clear as a bell

pia said...

Thought the first was cleverly funny--yes, the third did make me gasp

moonrat said...

i love the calvin & hobbes frame you have in the corner. it really speaks to my people.

Robin S. said...

Hi!

I have now officially come by to say, um, hi!

noahthegreat said...

I like how each viewpoint is different.

mariacristina said...

I like this modern take on the haiku. What if these three were connected, on an airplane!

pjd said...

Thank you all for visiting and commenting! I try to visit the sites of all those who comment (except robin of course since she has none).

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

You certainly created stories with each one, like them all.

UL said...

this is fun, fun! I couldnt stop the laughter on the first...

Clueless Cat said...

I love the first one! :)

And my fave lines in my 3WW this week are the same as yours :)

gautami tripathy said...

All contain stories. Thanks! I loved the first one!

bag and baggage

LittleWing said...

those three are great..three different worlds of emotions...

Richard said...

LOL then ouch! It seems the bottle tends to owies.

lissa said...

lots of emotions, lots to ponder over

WriterKat said...

Nice job. The first is a keeper!

BTW, have you ever heard of the book "Office Haiku"? Some really funny corporate poetry you might enjoy.

TC said...

I laughed so hard at the first one. Wonder just how many people have that very thought progress in the history of life? :)