January 30, 2008

haiku wednesday - January 30, 2008

This week's words are
approach
bottle
smooth



smooth approach... hot score!
warm the baby bottle, dear
(should have used condoms)


please, stewardess, please
bring a bottle of smooth scotch
failed approach, frayed nerves


violent approach
jagged bottle, knife slash wild
smooth words turned ugly

22 comments:

paisley said...

ooooo progressively tougher... very nice...

Anonymous said...

Very clever word play.

Anonymous said...

Laughed at the first one. Gasped at the last.

Rose

xo

Unknown said...

from one to three you cover some wide serious ground....I vote for the first, because the third worries me a bit.

Sherry said...

Each one of these is excellent -- each one deeper/different. I especially liked the 2nd one!!!

Unknown said...

I think the first one is my favorite, but I liked the second as well.

Tumblewords: said...

great selection - clear as a bell

Anonymous said...

Thought the first was cleverly funny--yes, the third did make me gasp

moonrat said...

i love the calvin & hobbes frame you have in the corner. it really speaks to my people.

Robin S. said...

Hi!

I have now officially come by to say, um, hi!

Anonymous said...

I like how each viewpoint is different.

Anonymous said...

I like this modern take on the haiku. What if these three were connected, on an airplane!

PJD said...

Thank you all for visiting and commenting! I try to visit the sites of all those who comment (except robin of course since she has none).

Anonymous said...

You certainly created stories with each one, like them all.

UL said...

this is fun, fun! I couldnt stop the laughter on the first...

Shopgirl said...

I love the first one! :)

And my fave lines in my 3WW this week are the same as yours :)

Anonymous said...

All contain stories. Thanks! I loved the first one!

bag and baggage

little wing writer said...

those three are great..three different worlds of emotions...

Anonymous said...

LOL then ouch! It seems the bottle tends to owies.

lissa 07 said...

lots of emotions, lots to ponder over

WriterKat said...

Nice job. The first is a keeper!

BTW, have you ever heard of the book "Office Haiku"? Some really funny corporate poetry you might enjoy.

TC said...

I laughed so hard at the first one. Wonder just how many people have that very thought progress in the history of life? :)