January 23, 2008

haiku wednesday - January 23, 2008

This week's words are
breath
scattered
tomorrow



red roses hurled, crushed
baby's breath scattered like rice
tomorrow he'll pay


final breath sears lungs
people scattered like dead twigs
no more tomorrow


kids scattered, breath held
won't find me til tomorrow
hide and seek savant

15 comments:

TC said...

Oh the first one made me so sad. Not sure why, but I couldn't help but wonder if he really deserved to pay?

susan said...

really like the first one. the rice got me.

pia said...

Liked the first one also

paisley said...

dang.. the holy trinity of kick ass haiku... very expertly done!!!!

watermaid said...

I like the way the three words made a connection between the three haiku. Powerful stuff.

tumblewords said...

red roses hurled - I like the image of the gentle being flung. breath scattered like rice - very visual. scattered like dead twigs - ouch, this one reminds me of 9/11. hide and seek savant - oh wise one! Really like these.

Sandy said...

Wow! Very nice haiku but I can really relate to the first one...rotten men! :*

S

LittleWing said...

the images are so real....loved each one...

Kate said...

I come in with the 1st as my fav too... I think its the visual it paints of a scorn woman... unlike like TC, it didnt make me sad... more wonder what happened! lol

Happy 3ww

Heather Kathleen said...

all were great! but number 3 for me! great work :)

Carlos said...

I very much liked the first.

Herb Urban said...

Nice haiku trilogy. The first one grabbed me instantly.

UL said...

yep, all of them...loved them all!

WriterKat said...

Nice work! I love the playfulness of #3 and the baby's breath image of #1.

gautami tripathy said...

I agree. We both wrote about crushed rose!

:D

I like all!