May 4, 2011

haiku wednesday - return from the wild edition

This week's words are grace, jitter, thin
Last week I was in the mountains of Yosemite, reveling in the beautiful, granite peaks and persistent, dramatic waterfalls. So I missed 3WW. But it was so totally worth it.

grace and hair get thin
the jitter has left her bug
but still she dances


children's feet jitter
thin and gaunt, they eye the feast
forget grace, let's eat!


broken faith, lost grace
thin alibis hide nothing
jitter in your voice

13 comments:

Ren said...

My favorite line "The jitter has left her bug"
Nice!

VL Sheridan said...

". . .But still she dances" Good for her! Great use of the words.

Travis Erwin said...

The jitter has left her bug. I resemble that line.

Christine said...

The jitter has left her bug, my favorite line too, that and, forget grace, let's eat, sometimes this is necessary.

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

the jitter has left her bug Great line but all of these are great.

Susannah said...

Loved them all but the last one contains so much 'story'. I really enjoyed reading. :-)

jaerose said...

'the jitter has left her bug'..great line (as the others say)..shall have to remember that one..it seemed your three hiakus spanned the years effortlessly..gracefully even..Jae

earlybird said...

that first one was perfect.

Linda Jacobs said...

Now, these are good haiku! Each one says so much more than three lines worth! Love "the jitter has left her bug"!

Kim Nelson said...

Peter~
The Good Husband and I were in Yosemite last fall for a week. One of the best times ever!
And that first poem makes me happy. I love to dance. Never been that great at it, but alway got such joy from the freedom, the expression. I'll bet that's how your aging gal feels!

Peter Dudley said...

Big thanks to you all! I guess consensus is I captured at least one good line out of nine this week. Better than my average! :-)

I'm trying to get out and visit you all as well, but it's tough going. I have to earn my paychecks at SOME point after all...

Jessica Prescott said...

'But still she dances' - just a great line.
It's cool you could go three differently-themed poems from the same three words. Good job.

sharplittlepencil said...

Thin alibis hide nothing... the third was the most potent, but skipping grace to get eating made me smile! Nice blog, Peter! Peace, Amy Barlow Liberatore
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/05/07/powerful-urge/