February 2, 2011

haiku wednesday - six more weeks of football edition

This week's words are abrasive, handful, loss
These are great haiku words. Which really increases the pressure to write good haiku. In a way, I like the weird words better because when I write crap, I can blame it on Thom's words. Today, I have no excuses.

handful of nothing
abrasive turf scrapes your face
missed tackle, your loss

handful of soft breast
abrasive sweater slips off
loss of innocence

abrasive, cold, hard
memories of love and loss
handful of beach sand


Lilibeth said...

You're right. They are excellent haiku words and you've done a superb job with them. I was going to do haiku, but gave up and just wrote a short prose bit. Thanks for catching the punctuation on it. I hadn't even noticed what I had typed there.

Altonian said...

We're in luck - three for the price of one. Extraordinarily good use of the words.

Unknown said...

Amazing how the same words, tumbled up, make markedly different impressions on the world. I love your first two. Read them several times for pure pleasure.

when the musics over said...

Football, sex, and self reflection. In that order? Very good haiku on all counts, Peter!

Sheilagh Lee said...

Sheilagh Lee said: Very well done

Simon Kewin said...

Great stuff Peter : moments perfectly captured.

Out of interest, is this football as in LA Galaxy or as in 49ers? Liverpool FC fan myself!

PJD said...

Lilibeth: Thank you! I loved yours; please don't take the punctuation thing as a criticism.

Old Altonian: Thank you! Three by three is my m.o. for 3WW.

Kim: You're sweet. :-) One of the reasons I try to do three each week is to play with different meanings or configurations. For me it's not poetry; it's wordplay. That's why I don't really treat these as real haiku.

MichaelO: Football, sex, and self reflection. Yes, in that order, generally. The only thing missing is good beer.

Sheilagh Lee: Thank you!

Simon: Nice goal against Chelsea just now. I had intended "six more weeks of football" to mean NFL (the Packers play one final game today), but I suppose it could work for either, eh? The "six more weeks" refers to 3WW being on Groundhog Day. If the groundhog comes out of his burrow and sees his shadow on February 2nd, then there will be six more weeks of winter.

Simon Kewin said...


Got it. Yep, great goal. Torres substituted too. Oh dear.

And yes, the haiku could work for either sport. Kind of hoping for a Green Bay win today although since the Giants aren't involved I'm not too bothered!

Jane Doe said...

What wonderful haikus! I especially like the 2nd one. I've always wished I could get the hang of haiku.

JR's Thumbprints said...

I like the third haiku because it's abstractiveness covers more time.