November 4, 2009

haiku wednesday - November 4th, 2009

This week's words are

I was psyched when I saw three short words this week. Only six syllables, giving me eleven all to myself! Well, guess what? This is a really tough trio. I'm not sure why. I think it's because karma is very specific, and obey and wither are both verbs... neither of which karma can really do or have done to it. Plus, this being NaNoWriMo, I am distracted and funneling my creative energy elsewhere. But here goes anyway.

grow, age, wither, die
leave all but karma behind
obey life's cycles

make your own karma
don't wither under pressure
but, obey your mom!

they obey conscience
bodies wither, karma soars
prison hunger strike


ThomG said...

but see, you did a great job. Loved the first one.

mark said...

Thom is right. These were all good.

Good luck with NaNo. I'm plugging right along with it, keeping on pace. Turns out that 3WW and reading other people's work was a great shot in the arm.

Sarah Laurenson said...

Yeah. Shorter is not always easier. But you do so well with these.

Robin S. said...

Worked out well, in my opinion!

Love #1, Pete.

Tumblewords: said...

Short is tough. For everyone but you! :) Good luck with Nanowrimo.

lissa said...

I like the second one, I doubt anyone actually obey's their mom

gautami tripathy said...

You did good. No doubt about it.

flames of karma