tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post7399431806787438918..comments2023-09-29T03:15:20.697-07:00Comments on Corner Kick: And now I completely lose your respect for all timePJDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-90992891257065759212009-02-15T16:33:00.000-08:002009-02-15T16:33:00.000-08:00Love this poem and the reading and especially that...Love this poem and the reading and especially that it worked! You did sound like you were at work reading a technical manual.<BR/><BR/>I'm waiting for the hula hoop video...Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-86355179707670929142009-02-13T17:17:00.000-08:002009-02-13T17:17:00.000-08:00Youtube is not cooperating with me since I turned ...Youtube is not cooperating with me since I turned down a multi-million deal to star in their "movies." I shall return.Stacyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03365582623380288038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-41919517116862120632009-02-13T12:45:00.000-08:002009-02-13T12:45:00.000-08:00I'd have fallen for this, definitely. As long as y...I'd have fallen for this, definitely. As long as you didn't read it! You make the sweet words like a late night advertisement on the radio!<BR/><BR/>Bravo!Sylviahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05925593802209715440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-86764991488414693502009-02-13T01:58:00.000-08:002009-02-13T01:58:00.000-08:00This is great. There are moments when your tone m...This is great. There are moments when your tone makes you sound like you're selling insurance, and others where you could be explaining how to de-louse a labrador.<BR/><BR/>The poem is sweet too. What I'd give to be 21 and in love. A killer combination for all kinds of gush, methinks.Whirlochrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09846196906206886945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-38609801354604674112009-02-12T23:47:00.000-08:002009-02-12T23:47:00.000-08:00FH, thank you. "Brave" was what I was hoping to h...FH, thank you. "Brave" was what I was hoping to hear. Not "stupid," which I expected. But perhaps you just misspelled "stupid" and I failed to notice.<BR/><BR/>Paca, thank you for such gentle treatment. I think you're right about the charm being in the emotional risk, not necessarily the actual poetry. But I have to question your judgment about the query letter. I'm not sure I'd want this in print in any place that would accept it...<BR/><BR/>EE--not only bought it, but <I>kept</I> it. Married nearly 19 years now. I know. I can't believe it either.<BR/><BR/>BT: NBA basketball team? I suppose it would depend which one. Actually, I think you've got a great start to a love poem there, if you then went on to make comparisons to several different teams for different reasons.<BR/><BR/>Jane, you get props for using the "brave" word too, but I'm beginning to sense a pattern. Custer was brave. The men of the Alamo were brave. The Light Brigade were brave. And look where it got them.<BR/><BR/>Robin, another brave! And also "sweetie." But you recovered with "lucky girl." I thought you were going to go the other way with "you have a good personality." For the record, EE's comment also made me laugh MY ass off. We'll see what Mrs. Pete has to say about it, though.<BR/><BR/>Aw, Koala, you dear, you win! I don't know what, but you win.<BR/><BR/>Wait! Wait, a late entry by Aerin just nips in and gains the victory at the end. I'm on my way to buy a hula hoop first thing in the morning.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-80056676772859750062009-02-12T17:07:00.000-08:002009-02-12T17:07:00.000-08:00"i was your pillow" - loved the delivery of this l..."i was your pillow" - loved the delivery of this line - <BR/><BR/>I dunno what McK's talking about, I'd fall for it <I>now</I><BR/><BR/>but only if you were hula-hooping -Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-3572803823793427652009-02-12T15:30:00.000-08:002009-02-12T15:30:00.000-08:00All right, c'mon ladies. Are you really telling me...All right, c'mon ladies. Are you really telling me a love poem like this wouldn't have worked on you when you were young? I'd have been sucked right in, just like Mrs Pete.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-47845299163731177442009-02-12T15:28:00.000-08:002009-02-12T15:28:00.000-08:00Oh, Pete, you darling!!! You're such a sweetie, an...Oh, Pete, you darling!!! <BR/><BR/>You're such a sweetie, and I agree, brave as hell to put up with us and recite your long-ago poem. That Mrs. Pete is one lucky girl!<BR/><BR/>Having said that, EE's comment made me laugh my ASS off. (Yeah, EE, well, the boy doesn't have them mean muttonchops goin' on, ya know.)Robin B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11471528485010071521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-70032165917494021762009-02-12T13:04:00.000-08:002009-02-12T13:04:00.000-08:00LOL at EE. I think you deserve a pat on the back ...LOL at EE. I think you deserve a pat on the back for bravely revealing your youthful love poetry. I love the way you dashed through it. You really fulfilled the brief of being as unromantic as possible.JaneyVhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04951739945670483199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-14889482818550913942009-02-12T13:02:00.000-08:002009-02-12T13:02:00.000-08:00That's a good point, Paca. Coincidentally, I once ...That's a good point, Paca. Coincidentally, I once started a love poem with the line:<BR/><BR/>Shall I compare thee to an NBA basketball team?<BR/><BR/>Good bad reading.Blogless Trollhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03983848259551488867noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-79465040486781692902009-02-12T12:16:00.000-08:002009-02-12T12:16:00.000-08:00Christ. Someone bought that?Christ. Someone <I>bought</I> that?Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-77527742860629966972009-02-12T12:13:00.000-08:002009-02-12T12:13:00.000-08:00I once started a love poem with the line:Her exist...I once started a love poem with the line:<BR/><BR/>Her existence pervades my being.<BR/><BR/>And so compared to that, you could post pretty much anything and it would seem good to me. I think the charm of love poetry is often not in its actual quality, but in the emotional risk involved in presenting it to someone. American men are not supposed to show any depth of feeling that does not involve a sports team, and so when they go out on a limb, it's charming in its own inept way.<BR/><BR/>Not that your poem is inept, actually. I'm not sure about the pillow line, but many lines seems good to me, and I was curious at the end about what has to wait and why. So, put this in a query letter and see what happens.<BR/><BR/>And, um, coming back to your reading, you definitely sound like you can't wait to get it over with. So top notch job. Actually, if you add a really nervous twitter, I can imagine this being the real reading, because the guy's so nervous about saying these things out loud.pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-10331453187372289512009-02-12T11:36:00.000-08:002009-02-12T11:36:00.000-08:00So brave to read your own love poetry in such a di...So brave to read your own love poetry in such a dismissive way. I was trying to hear how it should be read and I could feel the strength of the pull between you, like magnetism. It took me right back to when I was a student.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.com