tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post4284986885668828448..comments2023-09-29T03:15:20.697-07:00Comments on Corner Kick: Fiction Friday: solstice celebrationPJDhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-86659222473617967342007-12-22T00:36:00.000-08:002007-12-22T00:36:00.000-08:00One of the best FF post! It makes sense to me!One of the best FF post! It makes sense to me!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-73797633090934973732007-12-21T10:35:00.000-08:002007-12-21T10:35:00.000-08:00What a fun ending! I didn't expect it at all. I re...What a fun ending! I didn't expect it at all. I really thought the narrator was a guy at first - I don't know why I thought that. <BR/><BR/>Thanks for your constructive critique on my fiction friday. It's really helpful. <BR/><BR/>Hope you are having a wonderful holiday!lissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00706027242022517570noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-89918932729052405922007-12-21T10:26:00.000-08:002007-12-21T10:26:00.000-08:00Please ignore the typos. They keyboard on this com...Please ignore the typos. They keyboard on this computer and I don't get along very well.Square1https://www.blogger.com/profile/13559171378908608414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8014482.post-76746810656136959022007-12-21T10:25:00.000-08:002007-12-21T10:25:00.000-08:00This... this left me laughing. Thank you for that....This... this left me laughing. Thank you for that. I personally have never really understood the sky-clad thing, but more power to those who do understand it. Apparently your M.C. and I would get along famously.<BR/><BR/>I don't think the peice needs any tightening. Maybe perrhaps a touch of back story, like how long her mom had been married to her dad, whether or not they had any religious practices before hiss passing, those kinds of things would make it a little more personal, and possibly how your M.C. was handling the loss. Perhaps that is the depth you feel you are missing? otherewise the setting description, and the short plot are wonderfully woven.Square1https://www.blogger.com/profile/13559171378908608414noreply@blogger.com