March 25, 2009

haiku wednesday - March 25, 2009

This week's words are
earnest
layer
reactive

These were very tough words for haiku, I thought. Easy for a short story perhaps, but three lines and 17 syllables? I almost quailed and gave up without even trying. But I could not give up the fight!

reactive to sounds
brick layer works in earnest
sealing his sin's tomb

he drank in earnest
not reactive to headlights
piercing fog layer

reactive, he strikes
thick layer of blood and guilt
earnest silence falls
at

18 comments:

  1. Thom GabrukiewiczMarch 25, 2009 7:55 AM

    I think you did just fine.

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  2. AnonymousMarch 25, 2009 8:52 AM

    Hiya, nice three!

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  3. AmarettogirlMarch 25, 2009 11:00 AM

    Coming from someone who doesn't even attempt haikus -I think you did three times better than you told us you could do!

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  4. Aniket ThakkarMarch 25, 2009 11:09 AM

    You have inspired me to write Haiku's and I'm having so much fun with them lately. Thank you for that.

    And you managed quite well with the tough words... Awesome threesome! :-D

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  5. AnonymousMarch 25, 2009 12:14 PM

    PJD, you need to write a children's story haiku and read it for Robin's Voice Thingy.

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  6. Tumblewords:March 25, 2009 2:36 PM

    Ha! Even a trio of tough words doesn't trigger paralysis - great series!

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  7. JeevesMarch 25, 2009 9:13 PM

    Liked all of them. Very good they are. My favourite is the first one :)

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  8. sudharm baxiMarch 25, 2009 11:12 PM

    All three were awesome!!
    loved them..

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  9. anthonynorthMarch 26, 2009 4:08 AM

    Nicely done. The last was powerful.

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  10. Sherri B.March 26, 2009 5:34 AM

    I'm glad you didn't give up...these were awesome! I also loved your witty haiku on the 3WW page. lol...very clever. :~)

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  11. Tammy BrierlyMarch 26, 2009 10:03 AM

    These are all wonderful but that last one you hit out of the park.

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  12. AnonymousMarch 26, 2009 6:46 PM

    The last one is my favorite by far. Very dark!

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  13. Daily PanicMarch 27, 2009 1:09 PM

    I always read these twice to capture the images your words create. glad you posted!

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  14. gautami tripathyMarch 27, 2009 5:08 PM

    As always you did great. I liked the message in the second one.

    A Climb Through Altered Landscapes

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  15. Robin B.March 27, 2009 5:18 PM

    Late to the party, Pete!

    Loved #3. You tell good short stories.

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  16. Jack GreeningMarch 27, 2009 11:38 PM

    Wow I'm impressed. Haiku is hard, I always put the emphsis on the wrong silaablle,

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  17. susanMarch 28, 2009 7:05 AM

    A big story here right now is a St. Patty celebrant's killing 4 teens. The second struck a painful chord.

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  18. PJDMarch 28, 2009 8:35 AM

    Um... I go away for a short spell and come back to 17 different commenters? Wow, I feel the love. :)

    I tried to get around to every other 3WW this week, but I might have missed one or two since I spread my visits over the few brief down times I had Wednesday. If I didn't see yours and you want me to, drop me a line.

    susan, that is terribly sad. I will always remember the night I was 22 and drove home when I shouldn't have. Thank God nothing happened, but it easily could have. That was my one and only time, and I've regretted it ever since. The potential for disaster is simply not worth it.

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