August 27, 2008

haiku wednesday - August 27, 2008

This week's words are
desperate
lapse
traveled

Barely time to think today, let alone play along.

hot, desperate gasps
her hands traveled my body
short lapse; kiss once more

"a lapse in judgment"
desperate to regain trust
she traveled by train

cold, desperate gasps
her spirit traveled away
love's lapse made him snap
at

15 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 27, 2008 8:32 AM

    I loved the image the first one reates!

    You always do so well.

    Practising writing

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  2. gautami tripathyAugust 27, 2008 8:32 AM

    *Creates!

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  3. TCAugust 27, 2008 1:24 PM

    The first one definitely painted a picture! :)

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  4. Tumblewords:August 27, 2008 2:22 PM

    you've hit a superb haiku stride!

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  5. paisleyAugust 27, 2008 5:22 PM

    wish i could write like that when i cant don't have time to think....

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  6. ULAugust 28, 2008 5:04 AM

    oh my, you haiku well...now i have to gasp for air ;)

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  7. AnonymousAugust 28, 2008 6:20 AM

    I like the two opposite haikus (first and third poem), sort of like a person changing personality within just a few seconds

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  8. Robin S.August 28, 2008 1:18 PM

    Wow. I have no favorites this week-I love them all!

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  9. AnonymousAugust 28, 2008 3:35 PM

    I agree with Lissa...1 and 3 are yin and yang. I love how the few simple words describe huge emotions - I never could haiku and I so admire it.
    Thanks for your kind words on my post--hope you'll be back.

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  10. susanAugust 28, 2008 4:29 PM

    especially like the first one. thanks for the read.

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  11. AnonymousAugust 29, 2008 3:08 PM

    a talent for ku... and today romance ku.... the vision of movement...

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  12. Sarah LaurensonAugust 29, 2008 9:05 PM

    My wife forwarded these to me. Thought you'd appreciate them.

    Cat Haiku

    You must scratch me there!
    Yes, above my tail!
    Behold, elevator butt.

    The rule for today
    Touch my tail, I shred your hand.
    New rule tomorrow.

    Humans are so strange.
    Mine lies still in bed, then screams
    My claws are not that sharp.

    Cats meow out of angst
    "Thumbs! If only we had thumbs!
    We could break so much!"

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  13. Chris EldinAugust 30, 2008 6:07 PM

    The second one is my favorite, but all are very nice!

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  14. SamAugust 31, 2008 2:58 AM

    Love these - bravo!
    How do you choose the words?

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  15. JadeAugust 31, 2008 11:35 AM

    one and two are my favorite,
    very creative.

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